January 16

January 17, 2017

Everyone	If you did not READ the last critiques, then look at them on the blog. We are standing still if you do not improve each time you are on stage. Louder, keep accents going throughout show.  Girls’ accents are good at the beginning, then fade and disappear throughout show.  It was suggested that we do not have as thick accents, then everyone will be on an equal level. MS. Kuehler is in charge of that – talk to her. Men – you are not as strong as the girls – all men. With the exception of Len and Jim, the audience should hate you.  This does not mean yelling louder. It means your anger, your hatred toward WOMEN should be shown throughout your bodies, not just in your voices. Women, help the men out by being more afraid of them. REACT When Edwin is about to pass out, there is silent on stage PEOPLE NOISES before and after Bar scene was flat. No people noises.  It is funny for the new girl – who thinks you are all insane – to have a chunk of meat on her leg. There were no PEOPLE NOISES. Bar scene was a SILENT MOVIE One liners – must hear sound effects Girls look alike. All girls lost accents. Too many silent moments. Girls overpower guys. How do we see the two strong sides of Edwin and Arthur? Women must be afraid of the men. Bar scene – we must know it’s different. Loud drinking, etc.
Arthur, Lady H, Priscilla	Shoulders back, erect posture.  Better when girls are sitting, but standing you are slumped. Arthur, you have to have good posture all the time.
Edwin	Creepier from the get go.  We need to see you playing with the knife throughout – upper part of body. Reread last critiques on stage directions for first and last scenes.
Len	What a woman was better. Close your eyes and see your lady with a smile - EXAGGERATE
Lantern scene	See lust – Edwin. Move Maggie out of the way of the lantern light and keep hands on her shoulders a little too long. Maids, take the lantern out so Edwin can look at Maggie more.
Lady H Priscilla Edwin Arthur	People noises in your scenes.
Lady H and GG	Hanky scene – move more DS.  We need to reblock this scene.
Men	Use chains
Len and Edwin	Must see the lust in your faces, bodies when looking at your women.
Annie	Could not hear nor understand first line Dark gloves, not white.
G G	Do not block lights in magic scene. Girls cutting meat was too monotonous. In gutting shed, how do you feel about the muck?  React whether it is bothersome, etc. You have to react to Harry – you are scared to death of him. When Ellen retells the story about her first day in service… when she begins, sigh.  React to hearing it again. At the beginning, everyone needs to make noises according to what their job is.  Maggie and Ellen seem to be the only ones working hard. React to hand shake – wipe hands on skirts, etc. EXCEPT for Maggie and Ellen who seem to take pride in getting her hands bloody. We must hear Jesus in Annie’s song. Song with sarnie scene needs to be earlier and stepped on Eady/Maggie’s last line. IT needs to sound like it did at the beginning – not pretty.  MAKE FUN OF THE QUEEN. Fallen is a mishmash. Fallen women, must hear fallen – Polly- then it’s like dominos with girls. Scene after Ellen has to take Jim’s place was too slow. Awkward transition between Jim/Ellen and Ellen/Annie. Maggie, work behind the bar with Annie, then Ellen. Accents were lost in Maggie/Ellen/annie scene Moving chairs out during Priscilla and Lady H’s scene was too loud. Transition problem with Jim being laid off and Ellen entering, then Ellen seeing Annie.  React more vocally and physically to being laid off – Polly reassures. Begin earlier with Caps and gowns – maids help. In knickers scene – cheat out to audience.
Arthur	Try to show more restraint. We need to see you trying hard not to lose your temper – see the struggle within yourself through your body, facial expressions. Reread last critiques – cut one of the I’ll get you for this. More fakeness speaking to Lady H
Polly and Priscilla	Great scene with mirror. Hold hands or walk together after hat scene when exiting.
Nora and Emily	Good job in keeping busy, watching action, and moving stuff.
Lady H and Priscilla	Your prompt scene seems more your turn, my turn to speak – needs to be more natural.
Lady H, Harry, Edwin, girls	PEOPLE NOISES.  Girls whisper about ROYALTY visiting.   PEOPLE NOISES
Ellen	First line too high to understand.  Speak in soprano register throughout play. Gawping – step on lines. Think about kicking chain before stepping over it – see how this works /may or may not like it. Ellen, don’t give up so easily on working for Jim. Don’t give up so easily on warning girls.
Sound	All sounds need to be ten times louder. The sounds need to sound like transition effects instead of problems backstage. Thunder needs to be louder
Eady	Louder and slow down.  That’s our lot should be more sentimental than angry.
Eady and Maggie	We need to sense and see something of your relationship.  More eye contact.  Eady, not so emotional on your first line. We need to see the anger build – on both parts. Maggie, move up so judge on right stage can see you. Sit on the short stool and move it up past the crate.
Ellen and Harry Maggie	Make sure E does not see Harry when she is spouting. Harry, try to harm Ellen – Maggie protects.
Ellen Annie	Ellen, PEOPLE NOISES when Annie is telling her story.
Maggie	Soprano voice as well – screechy tonight. Especially with Edwin. React to thunder during Edwin scene.
Kate	When you clean the chair, bring it down stage. It was covered by the table. Bigger on guess we better go to club when Ellen says you will lose jobs
Polly	We will always have a job – reassure others – touch them.
Harry	Be careful about entering too early. Stronger – more stern – possibly push girls in opening, NOT ANNIE. Ellen, ever red – in disgust.  Spit after you say that. Move gutting table after you exit the pub. We need a dif hat and coat. You also need gloves.
Stage lights	Why did lights go on and off? Lights on the action.
Lights	In Annie/Ellen scene with her apartment, more light so we can see Ellen – not much.
Crew	If you are working, clean up after yourselves.  Dressing room was a mess with glue bottles.
Priscilla/Polly	Polly – seem nervous around Priscilla until Priscilla makes a face , then ask her if she wants to try on the hat.
Opening	Loved the discordant singing.
Edwin and Maggie	We’ll see about that PEOPLE NOISES. Be confident at first, Maggie. Edwin makes a noise with chain. Scared, fight, Edwin makes a noise like a girl when she pulls the knife out, but it further enrages him because he has shown a weakness.  He picks himself up, brushes off his pants, turns, and threatens her. She runs off. Maggie, hold the knife so he can’t get it. We’ll see about that – People noises from Maggie.
Polly	Bigger reactions seeing Arthur and Priscilla Hat further up on back of head Reassure during fired scene.
Priscilla	Enter between Gshed and Lady H’s house. Don’t pull chains down.
Priscilla & Arthur	Enter between G shed and Lady H’s house.
Lady H	Nod when Nora does things correctly.
Need to do	Light on Edwin’s face with projector.

 

1.       Edwin’s faint needs work and he gets up too fast

2.       Every one move with slow movements when you are on stage and someone else is the focus.

3.       Len, more reaction to g g singing off your customers.

4.       PEOPLE NOISES

5.       Work on easier way to get knife out.

6.       Harry, push Ellen more after she gives news of being laid off

7.       People noises on maid training

8.       Edwin, ANGRIER when Maggie shows up at Lady H

9.       Scenes to work on

10.   Bar scene

11.   Edwin, harry, Arthur

12.   Knickers scene

13.   Opening

14.   Ellen/ Annie

15.   Eady/Maggie

16.   Men and women