Critiques April
4, 2017
Maggie
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We get paid in one week – slow down
There is some worse off – slow down
Brothers and sisters
Chop off animal flesh
Little shiver in her voice – t, v, n
Ol Helena – diction
Breathin same air
Fallen women line died
Breath of relief – good morning, lord
tartaden
Th is starting to sound v again
Don’t fall on Lady H’s house
Watch if Harry has left
Quicker on Maggie’s help request
this is Kate none of us want to go to your meetings |
Gut Girls
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Tea whistle – DIFFERENT WoRDS
Bloody time it is
I’m knackered
More excited in lantern show
Lantern
I’m gobsmacked. That was crackin
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Polly
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Put your finger right on it (Ts)
Accent o0n dream
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Annie
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Sheep gutting sheds – entire sentence
tt, d’s
Do you get turkeys here – t and K
Tidy – DDDD
I never had no place
I’m happy
Sarnie scene – left leg on crate.
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Jim
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FASTER ENTRANCE
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Harry
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Beginning lines – hit all consonants
Cheat out each sentence
Find out – d, t
Watch cap shadow
Cheat out in sarnies scene
Ice cold – don’t know why I did this.
I've got a new one |
Annie Ellen
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We need for Annie’s dialogue to be at
an angle to the judges.
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Ellen
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Half again
Hack it off
Standing on your head
Metal plate
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Lady H
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Enlist your support – louder
Priority on club’s agenda – consonants
Do not flick Arthur’s nose
Start sooner on punctual scene – speak as
Priscilla is climbing stairs.
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Arthur
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Louder
Priscilla – s, l
Girls’ employers – consonants
Assert authority to audience
Woke up at the appropriate time –
consonants
Come with me
Louder with Priscilla
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Edwin
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Slow down lantern lines
Do something different in scenes so
that it is not expected. It looks
staged after a time.
On Maggie’s needing help keep head up
and do a whispery line so it seems scarier.
Hand on Maggie’s left shoulder so that Lady H doesn’t see.
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Kate
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Starting to sound Texan
Stop calling me
Watch back during Toffs
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Priscilla
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Calm down dear - consonants
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Taking too much time
Ellen - no compensation
Arthur - Yes, I will ask
Polly - here's to your first day, Annie
Maggie - let alone finishing
Arthur - after that's better there was a long pause to walk to Lady Helena's house
Helena - She is a bit dense
Emily - It's one of the girls from the club
Arthur - I'm glad you are learning to assert....
Everyone remember to choose your moments and not too many. Also enter your scenes at the right time and don't cross the opening in the curtain in the back! We can't afford to have the judges see that especially at this stage!
ReplyDeleteI thing that we are doing a GREAT job. We have improved with every practice and contest. Anyone have any ideas about how I can do something a little different in any scene? And I will also be working on the scene with Maggie asking for help in Lady Helenas house.
ReplyDeletei think a way you can change things up is do something a little different when you enter the gutting shed. you might walk a little further and maybe even get closer to my entrails. you've never been in this place before so you're curious. just a suggestion😊
DeleteEveryone choose your moments wisely. Choose places where pauses can create tension, suspense, etc. But be careful not to choose too many. That could potentially put the whole play behind. Another timing thing: get to your scenes on time and be distracting (no big movements) when it isn't your scene. And don't walk across the opening in the back curtains! At this point in the contest, we can't afford to have a judge see that. Y'all are doing great just keep working hard and don't hit a plateau! Keep improving your part as much as you can.
ReplyDelete**dont be distracting! (Sorry. Stupid autocorrect)
Deletei'm glad you mentioned me taking too much of a moment in the bar scene when i say "here's to your first day annie" but the reason it takes me a while is because i'm taking coopers meat off her leg, handing it to brooke and then getting my beer and saying it. any suggestions on doing it faster? maybe brooke can help me take it off so it can go by faster
ReplyDeleteEveryone is doing awesome!! We are totally going to destroy! Just like the song "we ready!" "We ready!"
ReplyDeleteIf we work on diction we will be great! Can't wait to see how everyone does on Friday we all have to keep it going and keep up the energy through these busy weeks
ReplyDeleteok guys, umm... i had no idea i was doing the nose flick thing lol. not sure why that happened, sometimes i just kind of go on auto pilot! have y'all noticed anything else i do that is odd like that???
ReplyDeleteI am really glad that someone went through and told us all the lines that we need to work on. I think that if we keep working on diction and making our lines clear, that we will do great at regionals! And thank you for letting me know that I have my back turned when I say toff.
ReplyDeletewe are getting so close to state guys, this is crazy! we've made it this far because of our incredible ensemble and the great show we have. Now it's time to really work on the nit picky stuff, like CONSONANTS!!! our accents make our play stand out, but we need to make sure the judges remember them because of how consistent and understandable we are, not because they only understood 3/4 of the play
ReplyDeleteI'm going back through my script to work on my lines and their meaning. I think it's good to go back to the basics and really focus on diction and getting the message across to the audience.
ReplyDeleteWe're this close to state, all we have to do is finish. Give it your all every time you can. We have to focus on being able to be understood, showing a story through your character to the audience, and bringing the energy every time you perform. Guys, this could be the last performance for our seniors, I don't know about y'all but I don't want it to be. I want to give the seniors a trip to state as well as everyone else. So all I'm asking is to dig in, give it your all, and go as hard as you can to get everything right for the next two weeks.
ReplyDeleteI think the things that are happening are great but one thing we still need to do is take care of moments. And DIction!!!��
ReplyDeleteThis comment was from me
DeleteNeed to work on high class accents. I may be able to find someone from England to help us, if that would help.
ReplyDeleteWe need to keep up the diction and hold our accents through the play.
ReplyDeleteSuper excited to go to regionals!! We can make it to state!!
ReplyDeleteThis be eli- My slap will be hard and we should make it look real and not staged.
ReplyDeleteMake the accents easy to hear and be different so it's like the first time for you to do it... let's make it to state
ReplyDeleteLord Tartaden during the fainting scene is very hilarious. However, if it doesn't seem like a brick hit him in the face when he smells everything, the effect is lost. If he would be more shocked and we could see more of an instantaneous change, it would enhance the scene.
ReplyDeletei will take less time on the compensation line, i was trying to slow down the beginning but i won't take so much time, i will make sure to hit the consonants on all of my lines. this has got to be our best performance yet, let's do this!!
ReplyDeleteAlso I was thinking about what we were just talking about in class. I think we should not cut back on accents. I assume we need to do the cockney right and clear and pronounce endings more in order to have the judges understand the cockney. I love y'all and I couldn't do it better but I want us to win so don't take this the wrong way. Maybe we should all watch the YouTube video over cockney again.
ReplyDeleteAlso I was talking to my family about the show and they suggested a couple things: use the lights differently to depict time passing. Instead of the lights being the same between each scene, if more time has passed (like when Brooke goes off & gets married) make that more evident with the lights/fading. Also, change Jonahs hat, you can't see his face and lose all the facial hair and "mean" look.